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ROCKY SHORE

Wow!Sophie and I found a huge crab .Okay it was dead and very stinky ,but we still found one.Today our class went to the rocky shore and found lots and lots of crabs They were blue, green and brown. Some were small and some big We also saw slimy squishy bright red anemones.

Sophie and I picked up big rocks and found lots of crabs. We heaved a gigantic rock up. There were about 50 creepy crawly crunchy crabs and 20 bright bulging beautiful anemones. The crabs slithered through rocks when w hauled up the gigantic rock then T.C said "camp teams"Oh w have to go back to the teeny tiny dorms now.

S.A I think I described it well.
next time i will make it in the present tense.
I learn't how to do paragraph.